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iron9567
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Posted - 09/29/2004 : 16:23:26

i write this because im always challenging myself to write about stuff i have no idea about in this case the point of veiw of a female please tell me what you think oh yeah i stuck periods at the end of each line on the program i typed it on because i knew they would be broken down because they are to long for the forum box i just wanted to let you kow i didnt do it for grammar reasons thanks and tell me what you think

TITLE----song of regret

VERSE 1

how can i get you to see this prayer im singing tonight.
the song about the agony my heart's gone through inlove.
how do i begin to tell you this.
this feeling is something so good yet so un beilevable.
with the deepest feeling i try to hide,
but the feeling im feeling at heart is the hardest to hide.

as i lay here trying to sleep with alot on my mind.
never meant to be away from him.
with the slowing of time im never gonna let go .
with everytime my heart sings to see him.
ill miss him even more.

VERSE 2

how will i ever find out what i should do.
i wanna confess the love he makes me feel when im in his arms.
dont wanna say alot of meaningless words to get him back.
so many thing yet to be explained in this troubled time.
a gift cant take back what we said.
how do i show i still love him.
maybe i should speak from the heart.
maybe i should sing alittle louder the song my hearts feeling like singing.
i just hope its not to late for him to not care any more.

i just hope he hasnt found someone to love and forgot all about me
i still remember the way he would smile everytime he looked my way
i need help finding a way that he feels.
with all the worries running through my head, i hope he hasnt found anyone new to love.
i wish i knew how he felt.
living like this cant do me no good.
cause all im feeling is the lonely beat of regret from my heart.

CHORUS:
baby please do forget me like the distanced wind.
i wanna prove the way you still make me feel.
youre the only person i want in my heart.
i wish you could rescue me from the pain im feeling.
the song of regret i sing when i think about how i did you.
i lay here sleeping hoping to wake up with your face next to mine.
with a little forgiveness is all i need.
and ill spend a lifetime making it up to you.
just give me time and ill never make you regret letting me back in your heart,.
this is my song of regret i sing while im laying here thinking of you while i drift off to sleep.

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